Fox news reports former Boston medical student, Philip Markoff, entered not guilty pleas at an arraignment Monday to seven charges, including first-degree murder. Markoff is charged in the death of Julissa Brisman and the robbery of Trisha Leffler. Prosecutors believe they have a strong case based on evidence linking Markoff to the crimes. Markoff is currently being held without bail until the trial.
Overall, a very informative story, but it seems to include too much information at once. The lead is 46 words long and includes a list as well as two different thoughts. I believe it could easily become two sentences. The rest of the story contains some sentences that could also be split to make the story easier to read.
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A kinda small point, but it's actually an AP story posted by Fox. (Note byline.)
ReplyDeleteI went back and did notice it on the story. I overlooked it the first time.
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